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Stephanie Pui-Mun Law

"Eternally Longing" by Stephanie Pui-Mun Law

SF&F Picture 6 out of 7 by Stephanie Pui-Mun Law
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The legend goes that Loreley was a beautiful maiden who fell in love with a Count. But as fate would have it, he was forced to wed with another woman. And so Loreley swore revenge and drowned herself in the Rhine. And from then, whenever sailors passed beneath the dangerous eddies and swirls below Loreley Rock, they would hear the echo of her voice luring them to the water to be drowned.
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They say the cliffs are haunted by
   a solemn, lonely cry,
and I have seen the doves and gulls
   dance aching lullabies.
Upon the shattered Autumn winds
   leap echoed, searing sighs,
and when the moon has glazed her eye
   from depths slips Loreley.

She combs her hair --- Rhine-gold spun light,
   sings torn flame siren songs.
The winking gleam of dew-drop lace
   seeps from her crown of thorns.
her face is Youth wed with crook'd Age,
   and pain for heart-rent wrongs
she's cast upon poor sailors who
   for Loreley did long.

From depths she spins eternal cries
   and Loreley does long.

←- Heart's Desire | River Music -→

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6 Jul 200445 Anonymous
Wow! I am impressed by your poetry. Your work is marvelous. I hope to read more of it!
26 Sep 2004:-) Tanafey
You have quite a way with words.
21 Oct 200445 Anon.
It's wonderful...............
19 Jan 200545 Lighting bolt
kinda sad
7 Nov 200545 Ridick, Cain
You really do have a way with words. I am always impressed when people can write such beautiful poetry. I don't know how it is done or how the rhythm flows so nicely through the entire thing. Truely wonderful.
9 Nov 200545 Anime freak
This piece really moved me!! Maybe even as good as Robert Frost and Shakespeare!!
21 Jun 2006:-) Tianna Brown
The Lorelei is one of my favorite legends. =]
You should definitely be published.
10 Oct 200645 Forever Fantasy Writer
It was perfect...sad...but perfect.
17 Oct 200645 C. J. Heath
I have read some pretty damn good poetry on this site. But this is utterly fantastic. Keep up with this sort of stuff; the world needs more of it.
8 Dec 200645 Easarue
That was beautiful.... I love it, but so sad...I know the feeling....
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About 'Eternally Longing':
 • Status: OK
 • Created by: :-) Stephanie Pui-Mun Law
 • Copyright: ©Stephanie Pui-Mun Law. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Loreley, Lorelay, Lorelie, Lorelei
 • Categories: Magic and Sorcery, Spells, etc., Celtic
 • Views: 490


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